Navi' must learn the technique of 'showing' a reader what he is talking about, instead of 'telling' a reader what he is talking about. In chapter one's first four and a quarter pages, Navi should have used those pages as the prologue. The first person narration did not work at all. I know writers are supposed to get to know the characters, but man there is a way to do it, and Navi' didn't do it. There was a lot of internal thought by Aiden; it wasn't styled properly, which caused a lot of confusion. Navi' could have benefited greatly just by using soft scene sets. Not having a consistent writing style really took away from this book. Font should ALWAYS be readable...even in the table of context.
Rating 2 stars
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